Can someone tell me what they think of my intro to my novel? I think it's PERFECT, agreed?

In my opinion I think you've used the word alein and it's terms to close together. It's a word that catches peoples mind and we read back over. It's like a splinter. All is smooth and flowing until you've hit that one uneven point and it's just there. Stuck in your finger. Try a different word. Or spread it out more. "Alein" is a bold word to use often. But I must say. I am very jealous of your skills. this is sounding magnificent. Very attention keeping. But be sure not to describe something to heavily. The reader doesn't need every detail. Just enough to give them an image in their head. You want the readers imagination to fill in the gaps. It keeps attention. And stays more interesting. Good luck! It sounds amazing!